如何在小托福寫作考試中得滿分
如何在小托福寫作考試中得滿分?我考過(guò)4次托福(純粹愛(ài)好，第一次分就夠了)作文都是滿分，SAT作文也是滿分12分。下面給大家說(shuō)說(shuō)經(jīng)驗(yàn)!
如何在小托福寫作考試中得滿分
說(shuō)在前面：因?yàn)槲以~匯、語(yǔ)法、句法實(shí)在是不行，所以走的寫作路線是純平民路線，沒(méi)有任何SAT詞匯，句法貌似只有定語(yǔ)從句，所以很簡(jiǎn)單……英語(yǔ)基礎(chǔ)和我一樣低等的人也很好上手。
我不是英語(yǔ)高手，我只是作文帝。
首先要搞明白的是，考試中的Essay永遠(yuǎn)不是抒情文、記敘文或者文學(xué)作品，而是議論文，是表現(xiàn)一個(gè)學(xué)生邏輯思考、思想深度以及行文結(jié)構(gòu)表達(dá)方式的載體，所以記住的是“重要的不是你的句法、詞匯，而是你的思想、結(jié)構(gòu)?！?/p>
幾個(gè)注意點(diǎn)
1.不要用長(zhǎng)句
三立在線作文最牛逼的北京的史愚老師親口教導(dǎo)我的，長(zhǎng)句有兩個(gè)問(wèn)題，一是中國(guó)學(xué)生水平不夠，很難寫出語(yǔ)法沒(méi)有錯(cuò)誤、意思表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確的長(zhǎng)句，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤、幾個(gè)逗號(hào)連用、倒裝從句混合是經(jīng)常的。二是看essay的人也是人，經(jīng)常是那種大學(xué)生研究生，沒(méi)人愿意看長(zhǎng)句混在一起的文章，短劇更討人喜歡，并且表達(dá)意思更加清晰，準(zhǔn)確。
2.細(xì)節(jié)要注意
出現(xiàn)My brother, friend的時(shí)候加上名字，出現(xiàn)university的時(shí)候要給上名字，給出事例的時(shí)候要給出時(shí)間地點(diǎn)人物，沒(méi)人愿意看“我的弟弟去了一個(gè)大學(xué)，然后再大學(xué)里交了很多朋友，后來(lái)去了公司里那些朋友成為了他的財(cái)富”，而“我的弟弟Dan去了Upenn讀書，在學(xué)校里認(rèn)識(shí)了Jeff、Dennis等好朋友，而他后來(lái)去Google公司工作的時(shí)候發(fā)現(xiàn)了他們成為了自己一生寶貴的財(cái)富”比上面那句好了很多。實(shí)在要寫流水賬也要寫出細(xì)節(jié)和感覺(jué)。
3.瞎編要編的像
不解釋
4.自己的事例難寫，最好不要寫
5.積累，積累，再積累
沒(méi)有積累和自己獨(dú)立的想法
下面就是926考的一題托福題，實(shí)在是想不出來(lái)考試時(shí)寫的每句話，大概簡(jiǎn)短的還原一下當(dāng)時(shí)寫的東西，希望有所幫助
It is more important for government to pay attention to health care issues than environmental issues, do you agree or not?
(題目，環(huán)境保護(hù)和醫(yī)療改革哪個(gè)更重要)
"Water and air are the sources of people's lives, and the bases of the world." This was said by the ancient greek philosopher Thales.(開頭引用是最簡(jiǎn)單的，泰勒斯相信水和空氣是最重要的元素，相似的話說(shuō)過(guò)，稍加改動(dòng)就可以出一個(gè)quote)(謝謝45樓的朋友糾正，是Thales說(shuō)的，不是Hume)Looking at the dirty air in the sky, smelling the gross smell from Yantze River, I can't agree with him any more.(這就是搞笑的= =) The environmental issues are always the most important to a country, especially the country I live in, China.(可以適當(dāng)點(diǎn)出我提出這個(gè)論點(diǎn)的原因，畢竟不存在完全客觀的文章，主觀因素客觀環(huán)境都要適當(dāng)強(qiáng)調(diào))
When the environment is becoming worse and worse, I have to say it is the most serious problem in this country. My junior high classmate , Anita, lived by the end of the Yangtze River. The industrial area is around there and all the factories pollute the water day by day. Unfortunately she got cancer, like many people who lived there.(真人真事，默哀一分鐘) If the polluted environment wants to "kill" you, there is no doctor in this world can save us. Looking at her face in the funeral, I finally understood the importance of protecting environment.(真人真事要寫出細(xì)節(jié)和感覺(jué)，否則很難不像流水賬)
It is always early to improve the health care, but never the environment. My dad is the president of the city hospital, and he always tells me "If the government gives us enough money, this hospital can be the best one in this country very quick by hiring best doctors and buying newest equipment."(真人語(yǔ)言描寫，用他人的口說(shuō)你想說(shuō)的話) But we all know that the environment is always harder to save. After second industrial revolution in Britain, thepollution in Thames River became horrible. When the British government realized that problem, it took them tens of years to solve it.(用實(shí)例證明) Just like my mom always told me, " It's easy to make something dirty, really hard to make it clean again."
It's kind of like the paradox, but many times, the environmental problems cause many health care issues.(一般考試都是二選一，有時(shí)候你會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)你選的那個(gè)其實(shí)可以導(dǎo)致或_沒(méi)選的那個(gè)，也就是說(shuō)這點(diǎn)要是點(diǎn)出來(lái)的話，就更證明你的論點(diǎn)的正確性了) Many datas do prove that, the people who live in a good environment have better quailities of lives. In 1970s, LBJ, the president of United States, passed a proposal which was called Clean Water Plan.(真事，積累) It was made to make the water clean in the US, and it did work. The most amazing thing is that the datas show the numbers of patients in hospital decreased rapidly during first 15 years.(瞎編，有一定的事實(shí)根據(jù)) That does prove my point, the environmental issue is a important factor of the health care issues.
As I said, we do realize the seriousness and importance of the environmental issues. We do need a "Heaven" with clean water and air, green trees and beautiful mountains. The "Hell" with doctors and hospitals is always our last choice.(結(jié)尾很重要，搞笑、正經(jīng)、引用都可以)
就這樣，希望大家都成為作文帝。
托?？荚囎魑?a href='http://www.zbfsgm.com/fwn/xiaqishi/' target='_blank'>范文:技術(shù)創(chuàng)新改變世界
托?？荚囎魑念}目：
Directions:
The independent essay usually asks for your opinion about a familiar topic. You will have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your response. Typically, a good essay for the independent topic will require that you write 300–350 words.
Question:
Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way that nations interact with each other in a global society. Choose another technological innovation that you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice.
托?？荚囎魑膮⒖挤治觯?/p>
要求考生通過(guò)定位，概括和分類仔細(xì)審題，就某個(gè)問(wèn)題寫一篇感想，或就一個(gè)事件進(jìn)行闡述，解釋以及論證自己的觀點(diǎn)，列出提綱明確主題并圍繞主題來(lái)寫作和修改文章。
托?？荚囎魑姆段膮⒖?/p>
Although internet came into being about 2 decades ago, it has changed the way we live much more than the last 200 years. Its influence on business, communication and information is so profound that people now simply can't live without it.
Based on the development of internet, a lot of new types of business ranging from international conglomerate to regional small online shops are also established. The most famous internet based international conglomerate would be Google. Companies like this basically do not sell products but their service. This changed the traditional way of doing business which always involved some concrete products sell to people. Internet opens a cyber world in which a huge market is untapped. Besides large companies, internet also prospers small businesses. For example, local stores can do their business online. All they have to do is to create a website of their own and all customers need to do is to go to their websites and order what they want. Then they just need wait at home for the products they just purchased to be delivered. This way, we never need to worry about the traditional exhausting shopping.
Internet also fundamentally changed the way people communicate. There are a lot of chatting programs, such as MSN, YAHOO MESSENGER, SKYPE, that make it possible for people from different parts of the world to have a conversation with each other as long as everyone has access to internet. They even provide audio and video services meaning not only people can chat, but also they can hear and see each other. Besides that, what really makes them appealing is that they don't charge us for doing these things. These advantages definitely surpass the service that mobile phone provides us.
Internet is also like a huge tank that can contain almost infinite information. A search has shown that right now the information that internet can provide us exceeds any library in the world and some even argue that it has more information than all the libraries in total. I certainly wouldn't doubt that. I use internet to search for a lot of information. Whenever I have an project to finish, the first thing I do is to go to the internet to find relevant materials.
There is no doubt that internet has had a fundamental change on our everyday life. Though there are many problems that accompany with it, we can't deny that internet is one of the most innovations in human history.
托?？荚囎魑姆段?父母應(yīng)代替少年兒童作決定嗎
托?？荚囎魑念}目：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
托?？荚囎魑膮⒖挤治觯?/p>
表明立場(chǎng)：這樣的做法有一定的道理。支持這樣的做法的理由：older teenage children還不夠成熟(immature)，考慮不夠周全(inconsiderate)，尤其涉及到經(jīng)濟(jì)相關(guān)的決定時(shí)，缺乏獨(dú)立承擔(dān)能力(incapable of being independent)。然而，“如何保證parents或者adult relatives所作的決定就是正確的”也是個(gè)問(wèn)題。另外，總是把孩子排除在決定權(quán)之外，是否會(huì)使孩子變得“沒(méi)能力做出任何決定”?the ability to make sound decision是人生道路上很重要的能力之一。
托?？荚囎魑姆段膮⒖迹?/p>
The issue of whether parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their teenage children arouses much controversy among people with different perspectives and backgrounds. Some people believe the statement is legitimate, because children are not mature and have not enough experiences to determine the optimal choice. On the other hand, people claim that nobody can control other's life even their parents. People should be responsible for their own behaviors and determine their lives. As far as I am concerned, I would like to refute the former and support the latter. In the following discussing, I would like to address some evidence to substantiate my point of view.
In the first place, the most important reason for me to choose this position is that old teenagers have their own thoughts and ideas. The fact that the thoughts of children are not perfect and logical does not mean their parents have right to eliminate their decision without considering the children's intentions. In the era of rapid social and technological changes leading to increasing life complexity and psychological displacement, the good decision in parents' time would be out of data.
In the second place, the job of parents is not to make decision for their children, but to help them to choose. In this period of 15 to 18 year-old children, they are always radical. If their parents make decisions instead of themselves, they will not obey these decisions. Parents had better told their kids about their opinions, worries and experiences as friends. Give much more room for their kids to think and decide. Respect and believe their kids will choose the better one and will face the result directly.
In sum, considering the aforementioned reasons I support the statement that older teenagers had better make decisions by themselves. Admittedly, our parents are our best and most early teacher. They would give us more important advices to help us choose the best decision.
托?？荚囎魑姆段?
托福考試作文題目：
Students should spend at least one year working or traveling before they go to university? Do you agree or disagree? ( 2016年3月13日)
高中生應(yīng)該在上大學(xué)之前至少工作或者旅行一年，是否認(rèn)同?
思路拓展：
【間隔年之利好】
① 兼職工作可以幫助年輕人積累工作經(jīng)驗(yàn)，獲得自我成就感，使他們對(duì)于社會(huì)有了更加深刻的洞察，為未來(lái)的擇業(yè)打下堅(jiān)實(shí)基礎(chǔ)。
② 旅行可以開拓視野、豐富知識(shí)、結(jié)交新友，鍛煉獨(dú)立性，這些對(duì)于未來(lái)的發(fā)展是有利好的。
③ 工作和旅行提高了人的社會(huì)意識(shí)，豐富了人生的閱歷，成熟了人的心態(tài)。
【間隔年之弊端】
① 很多孩子可能沉迷工作和旅行不再回歸校園，如果這樣，間隔年就失去了它的初衷。
② 青春期是人的求知欲望最強(qiáng)，也是學(xué)習(xí)能力和記憶力最強(qiáng)的寶貴時(shí)期，高中生不應(yīng)該耽誤一年的時(shí)間遠(yuǎn)離校園而去打工或是閑逛，否則，學(xué)業(yè)就會(huì)被耽誤。
③ 高中生沒(méi)有形成核心競(jìng)爭(zhēng)力，很難找到工作。即使是找到，也很容易被欺騙和剝削。
托?？荚囎魑姆段膮⒖迹焊咧猩欠駪?yīng)該經(jīng)歷間隔年
【首段】背景介紹 + 爭(zhēng)議焦點(diǎn) + 作家立場(chǎng)
Such is human nature to explore the unknown and see the outside word，that is why a great many high school graduates are keen on traveling or working for a period of time before attending dream universities. Conflicting ideas clash in determining whether or not it is a wise idea to inspire high school leavers to experience the Grand Tour. As I see it, the merits of experiencing the gap year outshine its potential demerits.
【二段】 間隔年之利好
The most important educational benefit of taking a year off before starting university life is that traveling exposes young adults to stunning places and exotic cultures. It is one thing for teenagers to read about distant countries, but it is even better to enrich the experience of the world on one’s own. What one learns by associating with strangers and absorbing diverse cultures is something he or she could never acquire in the classrooms. For example，I made many congenial friends by self-travel to Tibet after finishing my schooling. This fantastic journey not only expanded my mind but also alleviated my stress triggered by tight academic study. Feasting my eyes on the stunning landscape really sweetened my life and lifted my spirit.
【三段】間隔年之利好
Virtually, youngsters can also become the beneficiaries of working as part-timers too. By that I mean, earning a living has a key role to play in helping one accumulate relevant working experience, train one’s crisis-solving abilities and deepen one’s insight into the society, which will lay a solid foundation for one’s future career ladder. To illustrate, via embarking on part-time jobs, I knew that money doesn’t grow on trees. Then, I studied even harder when coming back to campus.
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