英語(yǔ)高手指導(dǎo)雅思的寫(xiě)作技巧
對(duì)于多數(shù)中國(guó)考生來(lái)說(shuō)。雅思議論文寫(xiě)作學(xué)到最后還是不清楚到底怎樣進(jìn)一步提高,前進(jìn)的道路舉步維艱。其實(shí),是他們把問(wèn)題想得太復(fù)雜了。提高雅思議論文寫(xiě)作水平的確有難度,但是,只要廣大考生了解自身所存在的不足.對(duì)癥下藥,問(wèn)題就會(huì)自然而然地迎刃而解了。下面一起來(lái)看看英語(yǔ)高手指導(dǎo)雅思寫(xiě)作技巧吧。
英語(yǔ)高手指導(dǎo)雅思寫(xiě)作技巧
Bicycle
Bicycles have become more and more popular in China. People ride bikes to their work places, to shopping areas, to schools, and so on. During the rush hours, you can often see a boiling sea of bicycles running in all directions. With the largest number of bike riders in the world, China is often referred to as the kingdom of bicycles.?(主題句不明顯,不知道作者想要說(shuō)什么:自行車(chē)越來(lái)越流行,要討論流行趨勢(shì)?自行車(chē)那么多,要討論自行車(chē)對(duì)城市的影響?中國(guó)是自行車(chē)王國(guó),要討論中國(guó)的自行車(chē)歷史? )
Compared with cars, bikes have many advantages(這應(yīng)該是主題句,在這么短的文章里應(yīng)該放在第一段). First, they are not very expensive, and almost every family can afford them. (這句話分成2個(gè)句子比較好,一句是key point,一句做進(jìn)一步解釋)Second, they are very handy and convenient though they are not so fast as cars. With a bike, you can go anywhere you like, and you don't have to look for a large parking place. By riding bikes, you can avoid traffic jams and thus save the time and the money for taking taxis(同第一點(diǎn)一樣,但這一點(diǎn)思路有些亂). Third, they do not cause air or sound pollution(沒(méi)有解釋?zhuān)@一點(diǎn)肯定拿不到好分?jǐn)?shù)). ?
Riding bikes does good to your health if you ride it regularly(這應(yīng)該是文章要論述的第四點(diǎn),但沒(méi)有連接詞,又分了段,打亂了文章的整體結(jié)構(gòu)). In modern times, people are usually too busy to spare any time for physical exercise. Riding a bike to your work place regularly serves as a good way to keep yourself strong and healthy. (2個(gè)句子的順序換一下比較好。因?yàn)榍懊嬉呀?jīng)說(shuō)了有益于健康,讀者等著聽(tīng)解釋?zhuān)髡邊s換了話題。第一句話應(yīng)該是第二句話的原因。)?
Therefore, a bicycle is really an important means of transportation in China. It has been very useful, convenient and necessary ever since it was invented. And I do believe it will still be so in the future.(結(jié)論態(tài)度不鮮明,沒(méi)有緊扣主題句。 應(yīng)該重述四個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn),然后給出結(jié)論)
一, 用詞
“bicycle”作者的用詞是中國(guó)式的。從題目就可以看出來(lái)。騎自行車(chē)的通常說(shuō)法是 “cycling” 或“riding a bike”,騎自行車(chē)的人是“bicyclist”或“cyclist”。如果根據(jù)作者的標(biāo)題,不應(yīng)該是討論騎自行車(chē)的問(wèn)題,應(yīng)該是討論自行車(chē)本身諸如發(fā)明、改進(jìn)、用途、價(jià)格、式樣、功能等問(wèn)題。文中其他的用詞,大家可以自己找。
二, 句式
“bicycle”的作者句式單一,幾乎就是一個(gè)又一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句順序排列,而且少有用形容詞和副詞修飾句子,使句子過(guò)于平淡。重點(diǎn)不突出,句式無(wú)起伏,詞匯有限,并在文章中重復(fù)使用,如:“騎自行車(chē)”,作者僅用“bicycles”或“riding bikes”或“they”造簡(jiǎn)單句。而“why cycle?”的作者用同樣的詞對(duì)句子做各種修飾。雖然文體是essay, 但因?yàn)槭堑窃诰W(wǎng)上的,要照顧各個(gè)層次的讀者,所以作者的句式和用詞都趨于簡(jiǎn)單,但并不單調(diào)。
三, 文章結(jié)構(gòu)
“bicycle”作者的思路是清晰的,但表達(dá)不明確,所以造成結(jié)構(gòu)混亂的感覺(jué),考試時(shí)會(huì)吃虧的。